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A Cramp(ed) Cave

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Over at Rosemary Mint, Shawna offers up a selection of word prompts in her weekly writing exercise, aptly entitled
Monday Melting. I thought I’d go beyond the voyeur stage this week, and give this exercise the old, way past college

Anxious vibrations emanate still.

Click. click. click. the wanderer documented the darkest
rook, corvus frugilegus, every captured on film. The shutterbug’s
Amagydala raced, pulsing fearful tinges throughout eyes and lens. {roar}, the prehistoric
Mastodon, a rebirth, here, now…why? Fingers,white-knuckling, his prized reward. Scared. Deathly now. And it’s only the most
Primitive of responses, a segmented trickling, that, only partially, eases the explosion building within

Cherry stains the euphoric portraits
Amnesia has left behind. Shining, yet rarely remembered in such vibrant detail. The loneliest
Volcano then constricts his shores and stutters the rims, of ancient coastlines lost within. It’s cries, of grumbling behemoths, slowly
Examine the stagnated outer air, emitting molten fragrancies, in the name of discovery; in search of it’s lost replica, isolated, scared and wandering alone.

That was a lot of fun. This weeks words are:



About hobgoblin2011

I'm a poet and aspiring screenwriter/songwriter with a passion for film, art, photography, philosophy and heavy metal. I love reading, mainly non-fiction, comic books, graphic novels, myth and reference. Family always comes first for me. I'm a proud father to two wonderful pups and two curious cats. I'm also a glutton for punishment aka the life of being a diehard Buffalo Bills and Sabres fan.

9 responses »

  1. Wow, you really had me from title to end here !! Well Done !!

  2. Woah…a very scary journey well described! The “Amygdala raced” — sure got my heart racing!

    • hobgoblin2011

      thanks, glad you liked the piece. Amygdala-it was quite fun trying to get it to fit within the poem.

  3. I love the flow and rhythm of this piece work. The worlds world smartly used in a creative way that mad it easy to read.

  4. I love this, Fred. I had chills while reading, wondering what might happen next. And I’ll tell you, more gripping than the storyline is your sound. You have “the ear” when it comes to knowing what words will sound good together.

    Love these:
    “roar” / “prehistoric” near each other
    “fingers white-knuckling, his prized reward” (“white” / “prized” and “fingers” / “his”)
    “eases the explosion”
    “Cherry stains the euphoric portraits” (particularly “euphoric” and “portraits” together)
    “stutters the rims”

    I adore “a segmented trickling”; definitely my favorite. 🙂

    Great job with the words. So glad you joined in instead of just reading this week.

    • hobgoblin2011

      Oh, yeah I’ve noticed this since signing up for a WP site, they really do get a bunch of spam, and do a good job of filtering, but every now and then for unexplained reasoning legitimate responses get put in there. Kinda a head scratcher. This is an amazing response, so glad you enjoyed it. Yeah, I’m glad I joined in this week as well, was a lot of fun. Thanks again, for the response and for taking the time to come up with the words and offering the space to have the feature.

  5. Amazing what a lens can and can not capture, but a few words can!
    Emotions can only be related by that which breaths – so ‘they’ say 🙂
    Amygdala was indeed tricky…looked that one up for the alternate definition of almond shaped.
    Thanks for your visit to my blogspot site.


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